Luna
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Luna
Mar 29, 2010 17:07:00 GMT -5
Post by Luna on Mar 29, 2010 17:07:00 GMT -5
***************** name: Luna Gender: female age: 4 height: 3 and a half ft weight: 180-200 speices: dire wolf Loner appearence: lean, long legged[for speed and agilty], wiry musles[built for running for hours], and thick glossy fur made for keeping her warm in the cold color: silver eye color: crystal blue markings: black tipped tail and ears. and black stars on paws. blue cresent moon on forhead personality: willing to make friends. To those who she cares about should any wish to harm them she'll put herself in the middle of the fight. To her enemies she's a nightmare waiting to happen history: Luna used to belong in a pack. She was the fastest wolf in the pack, but even though she was fastest the other wolves mistreated her, taking her food, growling at her when she walked by, and nipping at her to hear her growl back. One day the alphaTwilight did this and she couldn't take it any more. A fight ensued. After half a hour of fighting Luna came out the winner, which would normaly make her alpha, but she didn't want to be alpha of a pack who didn't want her so she left to find her own way of life sample rp: Under a blue moon appears a new wolf to the land howling her hunting song. She has come from a far away land to seek her own way of life. She searches for her own cave, a place she can call her home. She finds one in the side of a cliff. She prays to the Gods of this land that no others den here. *************
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 1:27:11 GMT -5
Post by Mellicha on Mar 30, 2010 1:27:11 GMT -5
Alright, Luna, there’s a couple of issues with your application that’s detering me from saying accepted right away. You say your species is wolf, but what kind of wolf? Dire, Timber, Mexican, ect. Judging by your weight it would be small Dire wolf, but you still really didn’t specify so I don’t know. You didn’t really specify much in your appearance. Lean is good, but fast isn’t an appearance… it’s more of an ability. Instead you could say that she has a lean figure with long legs that are built for speed or something along those lines. You may need to elaborate more on your personality since ‘Willing to make friends’ doesn’t really explain much about her personality. Last but not least, your rp sample is too short. In the rules it states ‘Your minimum is 3 sentences for Rping. One liners just don't cut it here. We prefer posts about five sentences or more’.
Now, by looking at your application I can assume that you haven’t read the rules since it is lacking some other details needed to be accepted.
You may edit your post and try again if you like. I’m not trying to be mean or rude, just helpful and informative. Good Luck.
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Luna
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 11:02:57 GMT -5
Post by Luna on Mar 30, 2010 11:02:57 GMT -5
changed it is that a bit better?
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 11:26:16 GMT -5
Post by Mellicha on Mar 30, 2010 11:26:16 GMT -5
It has been improved. Your RP skills could use a little work, but everyone gets better RP skills through time.
Here's an example RP from when I first started RPing:
Killage had watched Bozi and Nasir leave the group of wolves, wondering if she too should follow behind them to confront the vixen that dared enter the forest clan’s terra. Deciding that it would be best if she went, she picked herself up slowly and shook off the water from the melting snow off of her snow hued pelt, before turning and sprinting after the two.
Now the one above me is a good rp for somebody that hasn't yet mastered the art of para Rping (Paragraph rping). Its one sentence short of what we allow, but still good. Now... the one below this post is one of Arvais's posts from one of our older rps. You don't have to do something as long as this, but it's just here to show you a paragraph RP:
Arvais gazed at the lone wolf with melancholy jewls. He lowered his whip chord inadvertently as the story of how he had lost his family entered his audits. He could tell the brute had gone through a lot and was in desperate need of a place to belong and call home. He also could tell that he was unsure of what to do, scared and confused; And rightfully so, he thought, after losing everyone he held dear in his heart. His harks burned from the words he heard about the humans, his talons began to grip the earth, and gradually he felt tears begin to well up in his orbs. Are all humans so cruel? They cant all be cruel can they? His emotions were a mixture of sadness, anger, and sympathy, though sympathy showed through the most. You seem like an honest sort, and I think anyone who has gone through so much deserves a chance to rest. I will allow you to join our pack. I will take you to meet the other members of the pack, and then you can rest if you like … But first things first. Are you hungry? I can get you something to eat before we go. Oh, and by the way, my name's Arvais, alpha male of Kaninju pack.
You may have noticed a few words that you were unsure about: Jewls & orbs (eyes), whip cord (tail), and audits & harks (ears). These words are what some call elite speak, but they're not REAL words. You don't have to use elite speak and most likely those around you will not either. For those times you find yourself confronted by elite speak just look to out RP vocabulary in the OOC section of this form listed under RP help.
Ok. I would say ACCEPTED, but I need Arvais's approval also... and he's gone to work until 7pm eastern time. When he returns you'll know how you did.
Don't worry about it until then. :x
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Luna
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 11:41:49 GMT -5
Post by Luna on Mar 30, 2010 11:41:49 GMT -5
ok thanks i'm still trying to think of a history will post when i come up with one and sorry most rp i'm used to is pokemon and they don't need alot to battle
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 11:46:15 GMT -5
Post by Mellicha on Mar 30, 2010 11:46:15 GMT -5
I used to do pokemon rp, lol. x3 *goes back to editing the site*
Edit: Bleh! In my haste this morning I over looked the fact that your profile is missing some information that should be there. The information IS in the RULES of the site. Your profile needs the information from the rules in order to even be considered for acceptance.
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Luna
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 13:01:33 GMT -5
Post by Luna on Mar 30, 2010 13:01:33 GMT -5
added history hope you like it
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 13:04:14 GMT -5
Post by Mellicha on Mar 30, 2010 13:04:14 GMT -5
Yes. I like your history, Luna. It's spelt Alpha though just for future reference. =3
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Luna
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 13:11:43 GMT -5
Post by Luna on Mar 30, 2010 13:11:43 GMT -5
thanks added code words from rules i thought somthing to explain her personality would be best
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 13:35:02 GMT -5
Post by Mellicha on Mar 30, 2010 13:35:02 GMT -5
Great! Just waiting on Arvais to get home now. ;3
Why don't you go ahead and go to the chat board and talk. I made a forum game on there to pass time by while we wait to rp. P:
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Luna
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 18:42:47 GMT -5
Post by Luna on Mar 30, 2010 18:42:47 GMT -5
can i describe my wolf in siggy? that way people know what i look like without searching though board
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 18:45:31 GMT -5
Post by Mellicha on Mar 30, 2010 18:45:31 GMT -5
Of course you can! I posted my four characters' names in my signature. :3
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Luna
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 22:53:12 GMT -5
Post by Luna on Mar 30, 2010 22:53:12 GMT -5
thanks whiteshadow for picture picture of my wolf in siggy only difference is blue eyes and moon
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Luna
Mar 30, 2010 23:21:14 GMT -5
Post by Mellicha on Mar 30, 2010 23:21:14 GMT -5
Arvais says accepted, so welcome to Izaria! =D
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Luna
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Luna
Mar 31, 2010 6:59:20 GMT -5
Post by Luna on Mar 31, 2010 6:59:20 GMT -5
thanks
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